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Family is a big part of us, It’s simply an essential part of our lives. No matter who you are or your size, It’s always present at any moment. My Family is all for me, they are my power, they are my life. Let me tell you about my Family, It’s formed by my mother, my father, my 2 brothers and my pets. We are a nuclear and a small Family, but we are united.
Currently, I live only with my mother and my father in Rio de Janeiro, because my brothers live in other city, in São Paulo, they study there. My mother is a great woman, your name is Ana, she is my mirror. She is 55 years old and has a black hair. My mother is a caring and loving person, She is who takes care of the house and works in a school as deputy diretor.
My father name’s Márcio, He is 55 years old, He has a black hair and a brown eyes. My father is a joyful and a little complicated person, He works in our farm. My oldest brother is Pedro, He is a 28 years old and has a black hair. He is my hero and the best person of world. Pedro always took care of me when I was a child and still take care at a distance. He study mechanical engineering. I miss him. My other brother is Miguel, He is 21 years old, and is a loving and a little stubborn person. We fought a lot, but I love him so much and I miss him. Miguel study nursing in São Paulo . My 2 brothers live together in São Paulo.
I have 4 cats and a dog, they are my rare jewels, I play with them everyday. We love getting together on the sofa to watch tv is a special moment for me. My mother and I like cook many foods for my Family on weekend. When I and my brothes was child loved play in the lake in our farm, We played of race, We also liked to feed the animals, the goats, fish and chickens. My Family have the tradition of spending the new year at the beach and I love it, I feel very well. This is my family, she is full of mistakes and hits, but I love her that way.

Answer 1

Pra mim está tudo certo!

Answer 2

Family is a big part of us, It’s simply and essential part of our lives. No matter who you are or your size, It’s always present at any moment. My Family is all for me, they are my power, they are my life. Let me tell you about my Family, It’s formed by my mother, my father, my 2 brothers and my pets. We are a nuclear and a small Family, but we are united.

Currently, I live with my mother and my father in Rio de Janeiro, because my brothers live in other city, in São Paulo, they study there. My mother is a great woman, her name is Ana, she is my mirror. She is 55 years old and has black hair. My mother is a caring and loving person, She is the one who takes care of the house and works in a school as deputy diretor.

My father name’s Márcio, He is 55 years old, He has black hair and brown eyes. My father is a joyful and a little complicated person, He works in our farm. My oldest brother is Pedro, He is 28 years old and has black hair. He is my hero and the best person of world. Pedro always took care of me when I was a child and still take care at a distance. He study mechanical engineering. I miss him. My other brother is Miguel, He is 21 years old, and is a loving and a little stubborn person. We fought a lot, but I love him so much and I miss him. Miguel study nursing in São Paulo . My 2 brothers live together in São Paulo.

I have 4 cats and a dog, they are my rare jewels, I play with them everyday. We love getting together on the sofa to watch tv is a special moment for me. My mother and I like to cook many foods for my Family on weekend. When I and my brothers were kids, we loved to play in the lake in our farm, We played race, We also liked to feed the animals, the goats, fish and chickens. My Family have the tradition of spending the new year at the beach and I love it, I feel very well. This is my family, she is full of mistakes and hits, but I love her that way.

Pra mim, acho q só essas coisinhas deveriam mudar